Here is my rough cut, now what needs more concentration and time is the sound design on the sequence, especially towards the end of the film.
Feedback was took on and implemented immediately, its just a case of figuring out how it can be achieved effectively.
(Don't stand at my grave and weep)
The initial concept was to have a theme of reincarnation throughout it, which is displayed through the ice melting sub-narrative. I wasn't too sure if it working but after being viewed by Mike he felt it had achieved what it had set out to.
A fair amount of content conveying the main chunk of the poem, i.e the beautiful locations, landscapes and nature itself was captured quite successfully so i was pleased about that.
What didn't work -
I still don't really think the narrative that i was going for really ever progressed distinctively enough, in hindsight maybe i could of been less obscure and brought in a character to really play on the loss/passing of a human. As well as this i think i included too much imagery, for what my narrative was, possibly it worked, but
What can be improved -
All the sound needs to be refined and looked at with more detail an scrutiny. I want to have more contrasting sounds and visuals, keeping the juxtaposition theme running throughout as i'm playing with two extremely powerful topics, life and death.
What needs to be the focus -
Sound and minor continuity editing issues. See how i can improve the sound and fill the spaces appropriately.
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