Fiction Adaptation - Film/Rough Cut Feedback

FEEDBACK FROM MIKE -

- Fits the brief, is experimental. Ice works well, the jump cuts are effective. 

- Think more about the sound design. 

- Think more about bringing it back to the poem? Possibly add titles at the end. 

- LINK BACK TO THE POEM

- Currently it is ' an inspired piece by the poem, not a true adaptation. ' However I can change that by adding titles. 

- Make it more cohesive, give it a natural flow by using the imagery and sound creatively.

Overall the feedback was positive, with the main focus being on the sound design and its development. I now need to think more about what will fit the piece and add to the cohesiveness of the visuals and the accompanying sound. 

I did have some concerns about the ice shot, as i felt the jump cuts didn't quite fit naturally, however mike liked the juxtaposition of the fire and ice. One issue regarding the opening fire scene was its duration, so i'll think about possibly shortening it, as looking back it does drag quite a bit. 

Now its just about giving it the final few tweaks, at the end especially.